Hi, I still have few comments, to be taken gently despite the necessary critical tone (my language is not elaborated enough):
* It is written "(The article does mention a Dog, which makes a bit more sense logically, but it's an incredibly weak piece, and the variants aren't much better.)"
>> I don't understand what is about. Which article? The one of Fairy Chess piece on WP? There are "dogs" at different places there, which one are you talking about? Not sure that this mention is really useful for presenting your variant. As it addresses an external webpage and as it is not clear, better remove this comment.
* Archer is given as "The Archer moves 1 or 2 spaces diagonally. It can jump the first space if it's capturing in the second."
>> After re-reading this and looking at the diagram, I persist, contrarily to HG, to see the possibility that this piece is really a FA, so like the (modern) Elephant (as used in my variants). We need the author to clarify this. Can the Archer move to the 2nd square diagonally if this square is empty? Or it may go there only for capturing?
* General is given as "The General moves diagonally like a Bishop, or orthogonally on every other space. Note that, while this makes the General color-locked, it doesn't jump the spaces of the other color when moving orthogonally; those spaces must be open."
>> "or orthogonally on every other space". What does that mean? That DON't make obvious that it is colorbound!
>> "Those space must be open". Which spaces? All spaces, or all spaces in the path, or all space in the path of the same color, or all spaces in the path of the opposite colors? According to the diagram, that piece can move as Bishop or Dabbaba-rider. It would be less confusing to say it so.
* It is often mentionned that "space must be open". Open to what? IMO a space is free or occupied. (Open space is what we have in our offices, I smile). Please correct if you mean "free" (or void).
* Lancer is given as "The Lancer jumps two squares diagonally, two spaces orthogonally, or one of each (this option is basically twice the move of a Knight)."
>> according to this definition, the Lancer would reach other spaces. For example, from e5 to e7 (through c7 or g7). You mean "two spaces orthogonally outward".
* The icon of the Nightrider in the move diagram has not been changed. It is still the one of an Amazon.
* Pawn: what is the "far row"? Many rows are far there.
* Wizard is given as "The Wizard moves one space diagonally, and then may continue 1-2 spaces orthogonally outward.(Unlike the usual Wizard, this one is not colorbound, but also does not jump.)"
>> If it "may continue", I understand that it doesn't jump if the first diagonal square is occupied. But then it is said that it also jumps. So, this description is confusing.
* The reference to Thingiverse is not recommended as these files may change independtly of the Chess Variant Pages. For example the mention "(the Spy is grouped with the Wizard)." is already no longer true.
* HG's comments about the end-of-game seem not answered. As it was said, a King is not in "checkmate". Either it is in check, or it is checkmated if it cannot escape from check. If the King is checked, with no possibility to escape and in the same time the Prince is threatened, and will be threatened where ever it goes, then their owner may move the Prince, even though it goes under another threat. Then the attacker seizes the King, the Prince becomes a new King which is immediatly under threat and has to get out of check (it was not yet a King when it moves in the threat, so it is allowed). If it can, then the game continues, if it can't, it is checkmated. I don't see the need for a more complex rule. But being "in checkmate" has no meaning.
In short I recommend more editing efforts for this variant. Hope iy helps.
Hi, I still have few comments, to be taken gently despite the necessary critical tone (my language is not elaborated enough):
* It is written "(The article does mention a Dog, which makes a bit more sense logically, but it's an incredibly weak piece, and the variants aren't much better.)"
>> I don't understand what is about. Which article? The one of Fairy Chess piece on WP? There are "dogs" at different places there, which one are you talking about? Not sure that this mention is really useful for presenting your variant. As it addresses an external webpage and as it is not clear, better remove this comment.
* Archer is given as "The Archer moves 1 or 2 spaces diagonally. It can jump the first space if it's capturing in the second."
>> After re-reading this and looking at the diagram, I persist, contrarily to HG, to see the possibility that this piece is really a FA, so like the (modern) Elephant (as used in my variants). We need the author to clarify this. Can the Archer move to the 2nd square diagonally if this square is empty? Or it may go there only for capturing?
* General is given as "The General moves diagonally like a Bishop, or orthogonally on every other space. Note that, while this makes the General color-locked, it doesn't jump the spaces of the other color when moving orthogonally; those spaces must be open."
>> "or orthogonally on every other space". What does that mean? That DON't make obvious that it is colorbound!
>> "Those space must be open". Which spaces? All spaces, or all spaces in the path, or all space in the path of the same color, or all spaces in the path of the opposite colors? According to the diagram, that piece can move as Bishop or Dabbaba-rider. It would be less confusing to say it so.
* It is often mentionned that "space must be open". Open to what? IMO a space is free or occupied. (Open space is what we have in our offices, I smile). Please correct if you mean "free" (or void).
* Lancer is given as "The Lancer jumps two squares diagonally, two spaces orthogonally, or one of each (this option is basically twice the move of a Knight)."
>> according to this definition, the Lancer would reach other spaces. For example, from e5 to e7 (through c7 or g7). You mean "two spaces orthogonally outward".
* The icon of the Nightrider in the move diagram has not been changed. It is still the one of an Amazon.
* Pawn: what is the "far row"? Many rows are far there.
* Wizard is given as "The Wizard moves one space diagonally, and then may continue 1-2 spaces orthogonally outward.(Unlike the usual Wizard, this one is not colorbound, but also does not jump.)"
>> If it "may continue", I understand that it doesn't jump if the first diagonal square is occupied. But then it is said that it also jumps. So, this description is confusing.
* The reference to Thingiverse is not recommended as these files may change independtly of the Chess Variant Pages. For example the mention "(the Spy is grouped with the Wizard)." is already no longer true.
* HG's comments about the end-of-game seem not answered. As it was said, a King is not in "checkmate". Either it is in check, or it is checkmated if it cannot escape from check. If the King is checked, with no possibility to escape and in the same time the Prince is threatened, and will be threatened where ever it goes, then their owner may move the Prince, even though it goes under another threat. Then the attacker seizes the King, the Prince becomes a new King which is immediatly under threat and has to get out of check (it was not yet a King when it moves in the threat, so it is allowed). If it can, then the game continues, if it can't, it is checkmated. I don't see the need for a more complex rule. But being "in checkmate" has no meaning.
In short I recommend more editing efforts for this variant. Hope iy helps.